just so you know, when I saw this pop up while refreshing my f-list, I thought,
POST-A-DAY: GREATEST IDEA EVER Y/Y/MFY
because if it could get me this kind of awesome, brilliant fic-- MWAHAHA SECRET PLOT UNVEILED \o/
this story just keeps getting better with every new chapter! You have this talent for making me JAZZHANDSGLEE at one paragraph, then having my heart hurt for David and Cook at the next. The balance between humor and emotion is just so delicate, and you, like, ease through it like it's nothing and I AM IN AWE *_*
"Thank you," Cook says, muffled behind David's hand, and suddenly David's neck is really, really warm. Cook's grinning smugly when David yanks his hand away. Dang it, Cook's humor is totally throwing him off balance. I MIGHT HAVE SHRIEKED OUT LOUD A LITTLE. The mental image I got here is hotter than even a graphic sex scene, maybe because I have a thing for David's neck (...along with David's everything, ha).
Then the entire thing with Jeff and Lupe and I said this to you somewhere else, but: YES TO YOUR CHARACTERIZATION OF THEM. You had Jeff being an overprotective dad here (as he should be!) but you and the reader can see how the strictness comes from how much he loves his son and how hurt he was (well, him and Lupe) that David didn't trust them enough to tell them about the boyfriend.
Cook, who is the best pretend boyfriend an adorkably desperate (underage!!) guy can ever have. Them in the restaurant, with Cook totally making up their entire backstory while his hand slowly inches up David's thigh? Both HOT and heartbreaking.
AND! Every time David reminds himself of the whole pretend boyfriend deal, I just want to tackle-hug him and drag them both to the alternate universe where he and Cook don't need to pretend and just get gay-married already.
Also: your Jason kills me, and he's barely even in this fic :D I nominate him and David's friendship bracelet as best non-Davids scene in any fanfic ever.
I am happily anticipating the next parts ♥ SECOND DATE! MEETING DANIEL AND CLAUDIA AND AMBER AND JAZZY ♥♥
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Date: 2009-02-28 12:44 pm (UTC)POST-A-DAY: GREATEST IDEA EVER Y/Y/MFY
because if it could get me this kind of awesome, brilliant fic-- MWAHAHA SECRET PLOT UNVEILED \o/
this story just keeps getting better with every new chapter! You have this talent for making me JAZZHANDSGLEE at one paragraph, then having my heart hurt for David and Cook at the next. The balance between humor and emotion is just so delicate, and you, like, ease through it like it's nothing and I AM IN AWE *_*
"Thank you," Cook says, muffled behind David's hand, and suddenly David's neck is really, really warm. Cook's grinning smugly when David yanks his hand away. Dang it, Cook's humor is totally throwing him off balance.
I MIGHT HAVE SHRIEKED OUT LOUD A LITTLE. The mental image I got here is hotter than even a graphic sex scene, maybe because I have a thing for David's neck (...along with David's everything, ha).
Then the entire thing with Jeff and Lupe and I said this to you somewhere else, but: YES TO YOUR CHARACTERIZATION OF THEM. You had Jeff being an overprotective dad here (as he should be!) but you and the reader can see how the strictness comes from how much he loves his son and how hurt he was (well, him and Lupe) that David didn't trust them enough to tell them about the boyfriend.
Cook, who is the best pretend boyfriend an adorkably desperate (underage!!) guy can ever have. Them in the restaurant, with Cook totally making up their entire backstory while his hand slowly inches up David's thigh? Both HOT and heartbreaking.
AND! Every time David reminds himself of the whole pretend boyfriend deal, I just want to tackle-hug him and drag them both to the alternate universe where he and Cook don't need to pretend and just get gay-married already.
Also: your Jason kills me, and he's barely even in this fic :D I nominate him and David's friendship bracelet as best non-Davids scene in any fanfic ever.
I am happily anticipating the next parts ♥ SECOND DATE! MEETING DANIEL AND CLAUDIA AND AMBER AND JAZZY ♥♥