at first i was confused when i read that cook is a tattooist in the 2nd story whereas he is a rock star in the 1st story so i had to re-read the master post summary to get that this is kinda the "5 things" writing but in longer than drabble format; which is totally encourage by the way :p
i gotta say, your writing blow me away. every sentence is executed aptly, which in turn exude and deliver the intended emotion in max. i never want the story to end. i want to stay and just be with your character!
that's why i'll go find other stories you ever written (preferably cookleta) and immerse myself in it. right after i post this :p
also, i'm charm by the chapter title! it's precious :)
among the 5 (6?) stories, my favorite are snow white fell in love with dopey and prince charming found that sleeping beauty was a different person awake. both beginning of the stories had me confuse but it's AMAZING when i finally get it! which of course, prompt me to re-read again to savor the story in a different light :D i ♥ that feeling.
my favorite part in "snow white": and he'd just wanted to get home, to say, it's okay. Even if you forget, I won't. I see you. GUH. the feeling in this is so palpable and gives me shivers.
and in "prince charming", i'm totally sold by your portrayal of asshole!cook. the way you presented the state of his mind is AMAZING! OKAY! it's so so easy to hate him but at the same time it's the most captivating traits of him. i couldn't look away! his misery is fascinating and self-consuming! he burn so prettily. ahem. okay so, maybe i'm a little twisted BUT ... *sheepish smile* still, it's a good shift at the end. "Hey," he says, swallows hard. "I - it's really good to hear your voice." a breath of new beginning. i hope he got his happy ending :D
also, i really like the recurring theme in all the stories (dublin, living together, pad thai, etc). the parallel of each universe. that somehow, no matter where or who they are, both cook and archie are inevitably gravitating to each other. and also, somehow retain their basis personality and quirks that make them fit. and you executed this brilliantly. with just enough hint for the readers to conclude themselves. i love writers that threat their readers as intellectually capable! :D
p/s: i found this via delicious bookmark. and it'll go to mine too!
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Date: 2009-07-02 02:42 am (UTC)at first i was confused when i read that cook is a tattooist in the 2nd story whereas he is a rock star in the 1st story so i had to re-read the master post summary to get that this is kinda the "5 things" writing but in longer than drabble format; which is totally encourage by the way :p
i gotta say, your writing blow me away. every sentence is executed aptly, which in turn exude and deliver the intended emotion in max. i never want the story to end. i want to stay and just be with your character!
that's why i'll go find other stories you ever written (preferably cookleta) and immerse myself in it. right after i post this :p
also, i'm charm by the chapter title! it's precious :)
among the 5 (6?) stories, my favorite are snow white fell in love with dopey and prince charming found that sleeping beauty was a different person awake. both beginning of the stories had me confuse but it's AMAZING when i finally get it! which of course, prompt me to re-read again to savor the story in a different light :D i ♥ that feeling.
my favorite part in "snow white":
and he'd just wanted to get home, to say, it's okay. Even if you forget, I won't. I see you. GUH. the feeling in this is so palpable and gives me shivers.
and in "prince charming", i'm totally sold by your portrayal of asshole!cook. the way you presented the state of his mind is AMAZING! OKAY! it's so so easy to hate him but at the same time it's the most captivating traits of him. i couldn't look away! his misery is fascinating and self-consuming! he burn so prettily. ahem. okay so, maybe i'm a little twisted BUT ... *sheepish smile*
still, it's a good shift at the end. "Hey," he says, swallows hard. "I - it's really good to hear your voice." a breath of new beginning. i hope he got his happy ending :D
also, i really like the recurring theme in all the stories (dublin, living together, pad thai, etc). the parallel of each universe. that somehow, no matter where or who they are, both cook and archie are inevitably gravitating to each other. and also, somehow retain their basis personality and quirks that make them fit. and you executed this brilliantly. with just enough hint for the readers to conclude themselves. i love writers that threat their readers as intellectually capable! :D
p/s: i found this via delicious bookmark. and it'll go to mine too!
p/p/s: sorry for the long ramble o.O